Finalizing your essay

If you do not have a book that you WANT to read, you're reading the wrong book. Tell me. We will find you a new book.

Today's Goal: Work with a partner to peer review your essay so that it is polished and ready for grading!

The Plan:

1. You will be working with a partner to peer edit your essay. You want to make it the best it can possibly be!
2. Share your essay with your partner (press the share button and enter their e-mail.)
3. Use "Suggested edits" to make suggestions as you read through your partner's essay.
4. Below is a list of things to look for.
5. SCORE yourself on the rubric at the bottom when you've revised/edited your essay!

Help your partner by looking at the following things:

• Read her/his thesis to make sure it is clear.
• Highlight and comment on any sentences that seem confusing.
• Does all of the evidence support the claims your partner makes in each paragraph?
• Is there evidence from both the movie and the story in each paragraph?
• Does the conclusion restate the thesis?
  Does the conclusion wrap things up?
• Make sure all names are capitalized (Poe, Laughton)
• "The Cask of Amontillado" has quotes and Night of the Hunter is italicized.
• Are there missing commas? misspelled words?

At 9pm tonight, your essays will be locked for grading.

Period 7, please stack your chairs on the tables.

Summary Document Peer Review

Today you will work in groups on your Summary Documents to peer edit.

You will work in groups of 3. I have shared your document with the people you will be working with, and shared your group members documents with you (in your shared folder in Google Drive). You can view and comment, but the author is the one who should be doing any editing.

I'll explain the process as we go along.

You'll need THIS FORM. when I tell you you need it.

Things To Do Tonight:

1. Keep working on your summary document. Apply any suggestions given to you today, make sure you have ten excerpts (that are 2-3 paragraphs) and your book blurb.
2. If you haven't already, work on filling in the second part of each question - Why your excerpt is a strong example of the literary element it asks for.
3. On Friday, I'll be sharing options for publishing your novel. If you feel like you need to finish your story or make edits, start thinking about how you might do that.

DEFINITIONS OF EACH ELEMENT (AND MODELS)
If you click on the name, it will take you to the student model for that element.

Direct Characterization - When you TELL the reader about a character (looks, attitude, personality, likes, dislikes, hobbies). It is not enough to say one thing about looks. You need to include lots of information!

Indirect Characterization - when you learn about a character (looks, attitude, personality, likes, dislikes, hobbies, etc.) through their actions. Don’t tell me that the character is energetic. Have the character do something energetic.

Setting that reinforces character - A place can tell you about a character (looks, attitude, personality, likes, dislikes, hobbies), such as whether the room is messy or organized, or what kinds of things are on the walls, or the colors in the room. What things are in the room that are well-used? What is the first thing you notice when you walk in? DESCRIBE A SETTING, NOT THE CHARACTER.

Setting that creates a mood - Mood is how the READER feels when reading the story. DESCRIBE A SETTING that makes the reader feel something (tension, happiness, joy, helplessness, desolate, celebratory, etc.) Do not tell me how a character feels.

Sensory Details - This is a description that involves the senses (how things taste, feel when you touch them, smell, sound like, or look like.) Truly using sensory details means using lots of senses in your description, not just one, and especially not just sight.

Strong Verbs - If you’re using strong verbs, you’re being creative with your character’s actions. Be specific with your word choice. The more specific your verbs, the better the reader can picture what’s happening in the story.

Dialogue - Things you need to know about formatting:

• The punctuation should look like this:   “I love to read,” Ms. Black said.
• Not every sentence has to be structured like this one, but you need to pay attention to where I’m putting capitals, periods, commas, and quotation marks.
• Every time a new character speaks, start a new paragraph.
• Don’t forget the period that comes at the end of the sentence (after the dialogue tag.)

Climax - This is the height of your story, when the protagonist finds out whether or not they are going to achieve what they’ve been working toward in your plot. Give me the best part of your climax, and explain why it is the best part.

Subplot - Beyond the main plot, the main goal your protagonist is trying to achieve, he/she might run into some other smaller problems with some of the characters in your book. Subplot is referring to those smaller problems that the protagonist runs into.

Time Shift - It is not enough to have a character remember something from their childhood. For time shift, you need to write the scene as if the character/reader is ACTUALLY THERE.